Raymond and Perens respond to SCO
Posted Sep 10, 2003 17:40 UTC (Wed) by
jdthood (guest, #4157)
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Raymond and Perens respond to SCO
It is a good letter but I will offer some stylistic advice.
First of all, the tone of the letter strikes me as too heated. We are being baited; it is important that Darl not get too much of a rise out of us.
Second, given what has been said about SCO's executives in forums such as this one, I doubt that it is a good idea to start making accusations of slander. These accusations add to the heat of the letter and they invite SCO to go looking for evidence of slander against themselves, which they will have no trouble finding.
Third, there is a lot of purple prose in the letter. This also contributes to the shrill tone. Here is how I would patch it.
- to erect a compromise on a foundation of dishonesty
+ to negotiate on the basis of falsehoods
- then such behavior must cease
+ then you must stop insulting us
- swiftly
+ quickly
- we are instinctively respectful of concerns about IP
+ we are respectful of concerns about IP
- SCO taxes IBM and others with failing to provide warranties
+ SCO criticizes IBM and others for failing to provide warranties
- a form of sham which we believe you press on us solely as posturing
- rather than out of any genuine concern for users.
+ a sham in which you pretend to protect your customers but do not
+ really do so.
- You have uttered vast conspiracy theories
+ You have elaborated conspiracy theories
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